Chương 24: 12.Range Day from Hell 12-1
Critical Astral:Lost · Mr. AnonMirror · 270 chương · ~18 phút đọc · Tạo 17/08/2026
After Karl said "stand to the side and watch," he really did just set me aside—like a piece of malfunctioning equipment he'd finished dismantling, left to cool while he moved on to the next unit. I stood at the edge of the mat, back against the basalt wall that had just made my acquaintance. My flank hurt, my shoulder blades hurt, even breathing felt like paying Federation taxes. But the more it hurt, the clearer my head became. Because I'd finally realized what was most nauseating about Karl's fighting style.
Not the strength. The way he made every move look like there was only ever one correct answer. The first person called up was a broad-shouldered guy with a buzz cut—the type who looked like he'd transferred from ground marines and could probably dent a vending machine with one punch. He was confident. Those types usually provide the most educational first-lesson deaths. Karl barely shifted his stance.
The moment the guy rushed in, he stepped half a pace left, pressed his palm over the elbow, and cut his knee inward. Crack. The guy didn't break anything—at least I hoped not—but he was already on his knees.
"Center of gravity too high," Karl said. Second was a female soldier. Short hair, hard eyes, clearly not the type to take hits lying down. She was smarter than buzz cut—knew better than to charge straight in. She circled, feinted, cut for blind spots. Karl slapped her into the floor. Not an exaggeration. Like dusting off a table—one clean smack, and she was down flat.
"Your feints are too clean," Karl said.
"So clean you're practically announcing: I'm about to fake you out." … Fuck. That feedback was humiliating. And completely accurate. Then it continued. One after another. Tall ones, heavy ones, fast ones, aggressive ones, the ones who yelled, the ones who stayed quiet—all took their turns getting educated. Some lasted three seconds, some managed ten, but the endings were all the same. Karl was a machine designed to disassemble human combat instinct and convert it into error demonstrations.
Every strike didn't just hit—it came with built-in commentary on why you deserved it. And I watched from the sideline. Watched shoulder lines. Watched hips. Watched heels. Watched when that alloy arm actually engaged versus when it was just there to make you look at the wrong thing. The more I watched, the more uncomfortable I became. Because I was starting to understand. Karl wasn't fighting people. He was solving problems. The moment each trainee charged, he was reading for gaps. Chin too high.
Footwork too committed. Weight drifting. Shoulders telegraphing. Intent to win too obvious. Fear of pain showing too early. Then he'd slide straight through that crack and take them apart. I leaned against the wall and slowly replayed my own rounds in my head. First hit—why did I go flying? Because I tried to absorb the full impact head-on. Second hit to the flank—why did that land? Because I'd dodged the punch but hadn't extracted myself from his combination rhythm.
Third exchange where I managed to deflect his arm—why did that work? Because I'd finally stopped staring at his fist and started watching his whole body. … So that was it. Not where is he hitting. Why can he hit there. Oh. That was genuinely disturbing. Because it meant I'd actually been learning today. Not just getting beaten. I was halfway through that realization when Karl's synthetic voice cut in.
"Hoshino." Stolen from its rightful place, this narrative is not meant to be on Amazon; report any sightings. I looked up.
"Back in." …Right. Assessment time. I pushed off the wall and rolled my right shoulder. My back still ached, my flank still throbbed, but at least my legs weren't shaking like a newborn deer anymore. The class parted to let me through. As I walked back to the center, I could feel those eyes reattaching to my back. Different this time. Not waiting for comedy. More like watching a sample that hadn't broken in round one, coming up for round two testing. I stopped in front of Karl and looked up.
"So, Instructor," I exhaled.
"That mass public execution wasn't enough to satisfy your educational enthusiasm?"
"Second round," he said.
"You attack first." I paused half a beat. …What?
"You sure?" I raised an eyebrow.
"Letting a young, adorable girl make the first move—sounds dangerously close to chivalry."
"I'm confirming how much you actually learned."
"Oh." I nodded.
"Right. Still no humanity whatsoever." Karl didn't respond. Just raised his hand toward me. Come. I stared at him and took a slow breath. High gravity made every inhale feel like a surcharge. The training hall was quiet enough that I could hear my own respirator cycling and the distant hum of base ventilation. My shoulders hurt, my flank hurt, my right hand still tingled from that earlier deflection. But all of it felt sharp now. Outlined clearly. Good. Let's go. I moved first. Not a straight charge.
I wasn't buzz cut, volunteering as teaching material. I cut half a step forward-left, angling my line of sight, raising my right hand deliberately—loading weight toward my shoulder line to force his focus upward. Karl didn't move. No—he did, just minimally. The red light in his left eye flickered faintly. His shoulders settled a fraction. He was waiting for my real entry point, not buying the cheap feint. Good. I wasn't planning to stop there anyway. Next step, I dropped low and cut in from his left side.
This time I wasn't watching his fists. I watched his hips. Hip rotates, knee follows. So before that knee strike could fully load, I stole another half-inch inside, jamming his attack angle, slapping the outside of his wrist with my right hand while driving my left shoulder straight into his chest. Thud. Contact. Not hard, but real. The classroom held its breath for a second. Karl's body shifted—just barely. But I'd read it right. Not because I'd gotten stronger.
Because this time I hadn't been stupid enough to eat the entire force line—I'd stolen his space first.
"Oh—" I actually laughed, looking up at him while catching my breath.
"So you can be moved, Professor Tin-Can." That earned an immediate counterattack. Fair enough. Karl's right arm pressed down, moving to clamp my shoulder. This time I was ready—heel pivoting, sliding out along his elbow, my shoulder grazing his metal chest plate. For one instant I caught the faint smell of machine oil and heated alloy. Then I saw it. His lower ribs—more precisely, the small gap where prosthetic met body armor, briefly exposed by the rotation. Very brief.
Brief enough to seem like an optical illusion. But my body was already moving. Left foot planted, hip twist, right elbow driving inward. CLANG. My elbow felt like it had struck a military safe. Pain shot up my arm fast enough to make me want to curse in languages my ancestors wouldn't recognize—but the hit landed. Karl's body paused for half a beat. The red light in his left eye didn't just flicker this time—it visibly brightened a notch. … Oh? He was actually surprised. Fuck. Yes.
The specific satisfaction of catching half a breath in hell and still wanting to set off fireworks. Unfortunately, I celebrated too early. The next second Karl caught my wrist, rotated, and pulled me forward with him. As my vision flipped, I had exactly one academic thought: I'm done. CRACK. I hit the floor back-first. The surface was brutally honest about its hardness; gravity contributed enthusiastically. Together they efficiently compressed my small achievement into something very flat.
My throat locked, air punched from my lungs—I nearly returned this morning's ration drink to the base. Karl didn't follow up. He released me, stepped back, looked down.
"Better than before," he said. I lay there, dragged in two rough breaths, then managed:"Thanks for the review… want to issue a certificate? Today's Least Likely to Be Completely Demolished Award."
"No certificates," he said.
"Just next time." … Right. This place rations humor along with everything else. I pushed myself up to sitting. My wrist still hurt, my back still hurt, but the feeling in my head was getting sharper. That hadn't been luck. I'd actually seen it. His entry point. His rhythm. The gap. And I'd actually connected once. Just one strike. Like poking an armored vehicle with a toothpick. But it existed. When I stood again, the red light in Karl's left eye flickered once more.
This time I was almost certain it wasn't just autofocus. More like confirmation. Like a tactical subroutine updating a target tag: This one isn't broken yet. Continue testing. Karl turned to face the class.
"You saw that." Nobody dared claim otherwise.
"She's still weak." …Fuck your entire lineage.
"But she's started using her brain instead of catching punches with her face." The classroom went silent in a way that suggested everyone felt equally criticized. I stood to the side and almost wanted to nod. Because that assessment was accurate. Karl looked back at me.
"Remember that hit."
"Which one?" I rubbed my elbow.
"The one where you turned me into floor decoration?"
"No," he said.
"The one where you actually connected." I stopped moving. Karl's synthetic voice stayed flat, but carried something new—the cold precision of a professional making genuine assessment.
"Not strength," he said.
"Timing."
"You're not fast enough and you're not heavy enough, but you're learning to steal space." He flexed his alloy fingers slightly.
"In close-quarters shipboard combat, survivors aren't usually the strongest. They're the ones who steal the opponent's rhythm first." I didn't respond. Not because I was moved. Because that was useful, and useful things are the most annoying kind. They stick in your head and surface every time you get hit afterward. Karl turned away, calling up the next person. I was shelved at the edge again—no wall this time, just standing and watching. Watching how each person made mistakes. Watching how Karl dismantled them.
Watching how people who'd looked composed, capable, perfectly qualified to be protagonists of their own stories got reduced to very ordinary human skeletons in under a second. The more I watched, the clearer it became. The real skill isn't dodging beautifully. It isn't landing cool counters. It's making one fewer stupid decision. Then one fewer. Then one fewer. Don't lead with your chin. Don't give away your center of gravity. Don't hold on half a beat too long just to prove toughness.
Don't commit everything because you want to win. The Federation's combat philosophy, stripped bare, isn't romantic. It doesn't want geniuses. It wants durable bastards.

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